Hey guys,
Been busy with farm work etc etc, boring yes I know and I smell like dirt. BUT i have some stuffs here. Ive revised the outline after I got my marks back from Sorin and what was unclear was determination for her to do this whole thing. SO I added in her father being killed in the concept art storyboard sequence at the start instead of the parade and infaltry battles to make the story into more of a lean mean fighting machine:P There could also be the option of her father being an inventor which actually designed this war machine but the military took it off him when they kill him.
Also, trying to keep the story to the max of three minutes, I wiped out her looking at the blueprints (Sorin said this destroyed the pacing of the film) and the underground hanger because it would just wasting timing of the short film and our energy. This way from when she takes out the guards as she PENETRATES (:D) the base it flows alot better if she fights the big mutated dude in the hanger. The audience sees the hanger as an objective when she looks over the shipping crates but find out she has one more obstical to overcome.
AAANNNNDDDD maybe it would be good to have the fight scene invlolving them climbing up on this war maching and fighting on it?????!!??
Anyways, I know Bombi has some good ideas coming and im excited about what Neil wants changed. Hope you guys are having a fantastic holidays and I heard the christmas party was fantastic.
Cherrio
Brad
IM EMAILING YOU THE PROPOSAL SINCE I CANT POST IT:D
Ahahaha. lol Mocca's dad really burnt you, huh Brad? Its good, im liking it. The retro raygun gothic look in the second war machine is a great idea, i think we can work with it.
ReplyDeleteMaybe we should give this thing legs instead of wheels? That way they may fight under it and between its legs. What u guys think?
Ill go check out my email now. Great work Brad really. i can tell that plowing the fields all day really gives u time to think about these things :P